Choice+Argument

Overall, I enjoyed reading and exploring how our identities are influenced by past experiences. I had already researched subjects pertaining to the material, which I used, before I found

out the subject of the power of past experience was an option to write on. The topic is interesting to me. I've thought about studying in the psychology subject and it seems to be turning

out to be my career path. As far as how well the piece was written, it was not the best. A large problem in my writing was that I did not connect back to what I was trying to prove. Now

that I have progressed, when I read my old essay, I realize that I left the reader asking the question "So what?" This essay was, I feel, the opening to addressing the counter argument. I

had a dedicated part of the essay to addressing how genetics affects one's personality. Although it was not the best address, I showed the complexity of the argument. Up to this point,

my essay has almost turned out to be a qualifying essay. I started with the idea that past experiences has enormous influence on the creation of one's identity, but ended with the simple

idea that both genetics and past experience as powerful influence on the identity instead of sticking with my original idea of just past experiences influencing one's identity. I did not

adequately explain and address the counter argument and did so in a very confused manner.