Prose+Analysis

This was early in my AP English class and I made some stupid mistakes and downright terrible mistakes in this essay. In the original essay I actually mixed up the authors and

accidentally referred to the already switched author by his first name. I have no idea what was going on in my mind during that. The first and most blatant flaw in my writing is that in my

thesis statement I stated "to prove that rooting into ideas is bad." That is one of the most awful, unknowing, child-like thesis statement I have ever written. My next huge flaw is that I didn't

even talk about tone or purpose! I just talked about how he used logical examples and that he created bonds with the readers...that sounds good but I didn't explain or connect or

elaborate on any of those ideas! Plus I actually sources nearly whole paragraphs instead of a line or certain words. Honestly there isn't much to say on this essay other than that its bad.

Its so bad that I cringe every time I look at it and I really have a hard time actually critiquing it because it is so bad. I feel like I've progressed so far past this that I don't need to analyze

where I went wrong.